What he said (points down)
This piece has loads of potential, the theming is very nice to build suspense, but there are a lot of clipping problems, as the guy below me mentioned. I'm definitely impressed by the creativity and variety of the sections, definitely has a feel for war. Anyhow, I think if you could find a way to clean up the track, perhaps by investing in better recording equipment, you could definitely (in my opinion) land a spot on the front page. Nice work, keep'em comin :-)
P.S. That long high note really is sorta hard to bear ;-P